tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-29793018.post8895121662929000637..comments2024-01-31T04:29:38.858-06:00Comments on The Outfit: A Collective of Chicago Crime Writers: What the--? A rant.Sean Chercoverhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/00939494866272006802noreply@blogger.comBlogger12125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-29793018.post-67290175105491640582015-10-27T13:27:43.418-05:002015-10-27T13:27:43.418-05:00`
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MacDonald's FREE FALL IN CRIMSON; same problem.Dana Kinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01350344882342624735noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-29793018.post-56136369367966758212008-07-05T21:43:00.000-05:002008-07-05T21:43:00.000-05:00My pet peeve is lengthy dialogs in which I lose tr...My pet peeve is lengthy dialogs in which I lose track of which speaker is which and have to backtrack a page or two to reorient myself. You don't want to overdo the "he said"/"she said" but you also shouldn't underdo it!Dianehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12589473046882217457noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-29793018.post-91749055203041810342008-07-05T16:06:00.000-05:002008-07-05T16:06:00.000-05:00Maryann--you're so right. I see "though" a lot, to...Maryann--you're so right. I see "though" a lot, too. And too many ing-phrases at the beginnings of sentences tell me the writer is self-conscous about the act of writing.<BR/><BR/>dana-- what a great paragraph about "that." I love it.<BR/><BR/>cameron--yes, lack of contractions in dialogue takes me right out of the story. It's writer-talk.<BR/><BR/>Thank you all. These will go in my collection.Barbara D'Amatohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03991495702239085323noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-29793018.post-30085919272876779052008-07-04T16:54:00.000-05:002008-07-04T16:54:00.000-05:00Oh, and lack of contractions in sentences. You sou...Oh, and lack of contractions in sentences. You sound like a robot when characters say Do Not instead of Don't in sentences. I love his writing, but Michael Connelly is guilty of thisAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-29793018.post-80241765769925365752008-07-03T11:20:00.000-05:002008-07-03T11:20:00.000-05:00That. A good word, useful in its place, but I thin...That. A good word, useful in its place, but I think that too may writers that use it tend to use it incorrectly, which shows that they either don't know when to use it, or that it has become some verbal punctuation that everyone that doesn't pay attention to things that are important feels compelled to use. <BR/><BR/>And that's that.Dana Kinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01350344882342624735noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-29793018.post-53266785280256619652008-07-03T08:34:00.000-05:002008-07-03T08:34:00.000-05:00I am not a fan of the word 'though' at the end of ...I am not a fan of the word 'though' at the end of every other sentence. <BR/>as in "...but she was really honest though." It just annoys me. I'm also not fond of the overuse of 'ing' words at the beginning of sentences "Winding her watch, she..." instead of "she wound her watch and..." It makes me crazy when I re-read my own pages and see several paragraphs in a row like that. <BR/>And cameron, IAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-29793018.post-31370016016778898962008-07-03T06:37:00.000-05:002008-07-03T06:37:00.000-05:00pete--yes, when I first started using word process...pete--yes, when I first started using word processing, the thing I liked most was search. I could find and get rid of all the "of courses" and so on.<BR/><BR/>Thanks Sara and Cameron. Mental notes and last-book stuff are pet peeves of mine, too. They will go in the list I'm making up.Barbara D'Amatohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03991495702239085323noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-29793018.post-56958105094838388902008-07-02T22:48:00.000-05:002008-07-02T22:48:00.000-05:00First person novels where the protagonist narrates...First person novels where the protagonist narrates exposition on everything that's happened in the last few books for a page or two.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-29793018.post-60515004406046568842008-07-02T21:35:00.001-05:002008-07-02T21:35:00.001-05:00That previous anonymous is me--somehow my name did...That previous anonymous is me--somehow my name didn't take.<BR/><BR/>SaraAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-29793018.post-75236935947436494532008-07-02T21:35:00.000-05:002008-07-02T21:35:00.000-05:00Put me down for characters making mental notes.Put me down for characters making mental notes.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-29793018.post-45609521609999837032008-07-02T16:54:00.000-05:002008-07-02T16:54:00.000-05:00During my last comb-through of my novel in progres...During my last comb-through of my novel in progress, I noticed far too many instances of "in fact", "of course" and other extraneous asides. Most of them are now purged.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com